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Welp, after a month of work here I present part 2! I hope everything makes sense and people are in character, feel free to crit anything that needs it.

One more part to go :iconffffplz:

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Just a quick update: In regards to personal life there's some stuff going on right now I'm not really happy about regarding family, and then there's school as well. I won't by any means slack on my work to get things done, I'm already this far into the game I'm not letting any self pity or anguish make my decisions for me. I'm just putting it out there if something does happen to come up the quality might go down a bit, but the story is still as it is scripted.
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CorvusRaven Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Professional Filmographer
I love how you did this. Helena looks awesome in your style. The fight scene is really cool so far. I like how you have the text at the bottom, it makes everything read well
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NuclearLoop Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! =D I was going for a more 'movie' look so captions fit better than speech bubbles haha
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CorvusRaven Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Professional Filmographer
Yeah it reminds me of subtitles C:
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AlfaFilly Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Maaaan late comment is late BUT I DON'T CARE cause you already know how I feel about it BUT STILL >8C

Making Bernard send the spikey rocks into the air was an interesting way to show how Bernard creates stuff. And poor n00b Marty doesn't have a clue... or does he? BU
I liked how you portrayed the emotions and such, and the movements of each panel. Especially when Helena was walking away from Saiph. Poor Saiph gets left behind again 8'I

The only thing about this part that threw me off a couple times was a couple panels in the anti-gravity part. When Marty was holding the bowling ball above Helena's head, wouldn't the ball just kinda float in place and not fall? So it didn't seem that intimidating of a gesture as Marty made it out to be. And I think at one point Marty and Helena went to standing on the ground, or kinda hovering above the ground but looking as if they were standing. I don't know if that would be possible to retain your balance that much, especially considering Mart was sorta flailing all around and Helena was just kinda all "BI" sitting there. I'd expect her to freak out a little more and go flailing like mad or something cause she wouldn't have been used to that sort of sensation. Not that you can go back to change this stuff, but maybe just pay more attention to those little things in the future. 8U Just the aspect of the physics of that kinda thing, cause it seemed to fluctuate a bunch.

Also I can't stop giggling at Lindafloursack laying on Harliefloursack. It makes me laugh so much 8'U She's so lazy >8C GOSH LINDA.

And suspeeeeeence everywhere 8'U
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NuclearLoop Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Man stop being so late with things >8C

Marty must HARNESS THE POWAAAAAH. This he will find >8C

Yeah this is true, though the balls still attached to whatever is comin outta Bernard he could probably throw it downwards but I get where you're comin from, the floating part too. I kinda had to plan out their positions ahead of time considering Helena needed to be close enough to the floor to launch herself off when she goes upwards, I just followed closely to how I was scripting things 8'U But in reality I'm sure she'd probably go more all over the place, that and when she swings the axe realistically she would probably be spinning like a top because no air resistance 8D

But thanks for the tips >:U

Lindafloursack just wants her snuggles even if she is a floursack >8C
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Vilest Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
The muzzle of the rat character in his first appearance doesn't align correctly with the rest of the head.

Also another thing I noted is you could do more to make the noses on the people look like they stick out, as they are, it looks like they have concave faces.

Let me know if you need further explanation.

Other than that, job well done! This has been interesting.
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NuclearLoop Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thanks for pointing that out! When you mean stick out for the noses, do you mean add value to it or draw it differently?
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Vilest Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
This might better illustrate it. Forgive the sloppiness, I have no tablet.
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But yeah for the noses, adding some value to the that area will help suggest that the faces indeed stick out instead of being flat. I think you're clever enough to know how light works.

Or if you like keeping the style simplified, it could be as easy as suggesting the sides of the nostrils.
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Hope this helps. :V
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NuclearLoop Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Ohhh yeah I see what you mean now.

I've stayed away from shading from the most part just because time constraints on getting these things done but I'll definitely keep this in mind, thanks!
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Vilest Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
No problem!
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Cloudbat Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
...dammit Lo, I'm going to be dying of suspense 8C

Sooooo goooood

Hope things get better D:
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NuclearLoop Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Cliffhangers are my specialty.

And thank you, I hope so as well xD
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Darkside-Rojas Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
EPIC OH CRAP FACE AND CLIFFHANGER >8C
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NuclearLoop Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Muahahahahahaha
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Darkside-Rojas Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Two for three and rollin' strong, I'm really itchin' to see how this is all going to end! I is humbled by epic epicness <83




I think everyone can relate to having issues surrounding family, and school of course. It's never fun to put up with, that's for sure. I pray things get better for ya soon though.
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TheBattyCrow Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellent, this is super! Amazing job on the layout, expressions, characters, I'm really enjoying this so far!
--and I see Marty's tail is still busted up :O_o: owww lol

Also, sorry about the family issues. I know how you feel; we've been having... issues... and it's been going on for almost four years now. It's stinks, really, really stinks.
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NuclearLoop Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thanks!

Issues just suck :C
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TheBattyCrow Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
And it's even worse with the whole family involved :P
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Shinkoryu14 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ffffffff, this is so epic and we are so screwed, lol.

I love the exchange between Helena and Saiph at the beginning, the way Helena doesn't say much but her feelings are so clearly conveyed in what little she does have to say to him. And Death is hanging around bum bum bum!

Also, the expressions in this are fantastic. How do you faces?

Marty, using Helena's lack of familiarity with sci-fi tech against her, for shame! D=<

And that cliffhanger FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF-
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NuclearLoop Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Shush, before I drown you in a bucket of faith.

I am glad you enjoyed it! :'D Expressions are always fun even though I doubt I do them right, but I'm glad they worked regardless!

Creating a game for them to play that only he knows how to instead of killing her on the spot seems pretty fair to me! =D

Muahahahahahahaha
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